Game Changer


















Photo credit: clarita from morguefile.com




Seething
Breathing
Massive thoughts

Shaking
Breaking
Down my brain

My eyes glisten
With knowing
But it's ignored

At
This
Moment

I
Now
See

You are more
Than you've ever been
And there is no going back

Hateful
Spiteful
Spitting venom

Saying
Playing
Blame games

Your eyes sparkle
With knowing
And it's meaningless


Dana



~Written for dVerse Poets Pub
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10 comments:

  1. this feels like a painting where you need time to stand a bit and look deeper to catch all the emotions and thinner lines that the painter included..some hidden for the eyes and only can be felt

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    1. Thanks... I didn't want it to be so broad, but I couldn't help myself. The words do what they want!

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  2. so many layers of emotion on your canvas, the hinge point for me being you are more than you have ever been...more than what? it is not really defined which allows us to enter our own though as we move forward and backward in this...i like...smiles.

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    1. Yes, those lines are the heart of the poem. They are what inspired the rest!

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  3. Tightly written and full of emotion. I like it!

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    1. Thanks Mama Zen for your wonderful comment and for stopping by. I sure do cherish everyone's words.

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  4. Dana, you have definitely 'painted ' difficult and intense feelings well with your words!

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    1. Thank you!I'm glad you stopped by to read.

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  5. The last stanza here really brings the poem into focus--biting, and bitter but also some resolution. The staccato line structure works really well.

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    1. Thank you very much!I appreciate the kind words and you stopping by to check it out.

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