Raw

photo by Mark Haley




Raw, yet breathtaking
Despite a harsh landscape
Stone by porous stone
Stepping lightly into the horizon
And into a reassuring breathe of air
Raw, yet breathtaking
Crumbling, but not yet ready to give

Dana




Written for The Mag
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21 comments:

  1. The repeated line works nicely here...

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    1. Thanks Tess!! I just couldn't resist... had to write about this picture. It speaks to how I've been feeling lately.

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    1. Thank you Laurie!! I'm glad I was able to participate this week!

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  3. crumbling but not ready to give....
    a lot like life at times eh?

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    1. Exactly Brian... it does describe my life at the moment. Stepping into the future slowly, but steadily even though at the moment it looks very bleak. Thanks!

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  4. this is lovely-and very powerful.

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  5. Your poem makes the stones turn into sentient beings. How radiant they are now. Thank you for that!

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    1. Awe... your so sweet! Thank you very much for taking the time to stop by and read!!

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  6. Your poem is raw, yet breathtaking. :) I love the repetition of that line, and the starkness of the landscape your words paint.

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    1. Your comment has made me so very happy... that's exactly what I was trying to convey! Thank you very much!!

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  7. One word seems to capture the spirit of this poem for me "life"

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  8. I know the landscape and you have it just right.

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  9. Great description! I like the idea of the stones stepping lightly.

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  10. I think I am crumbling but not ready to give more often than not.

    Great line.

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  11. Raw yet breathtaking..the repetition works well..

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