His Venus

Venus and The Sailor, 1925, by Salvador Dali




Tongue skimming across cracked lips as
Tobacco smoke curls around pink flesh
Rising in the direction of his gaze
Becoming night
In which his Venus illuminates

Longing lives within bloodshot eyes
Having witnessed death, destruction
Longing floats upon lyrics of a sailors song
Howling
Desiring her to leave her perch
To join him

His arms outstretched to accept

Nightly he awaits her spirit
Upon the heavens she graces
Guiding him toward her- Home
Envisioning her manifested
Cradling her glory meant only for him

Dana



~ Written for Magpie Tales
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23 comments:

  1. nice..you really set the scene well there in the opening...this kinda took on myth for me a bit...with the waiting for her ghost/spirit....all her glory to him...smiles...nice touch as well...

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    1. It is bordering on myth and reality depending on how you want to look at it! Thanks for stopping by!

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  2. Lovely, especially:

    Longing floats upon lyrics of a sailors song
    Howling
    Desiring her to leave her perch
    To join him

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    1. Thanks,I believe that longing and loneliness are very powerful emotions!

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  4. Nicely written, and rather powerful.

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    1. Thank you! Emotions are very powerful things!

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  5. Wow, powerful is a good word to describe this. I too like that start, scene set with the details of smoking, and then, 'Longing lives within bloodshot eyes' really struck me. Kudos on this Dana!

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    1. Thank you! I really appreciate that. I've been trying to learn how to set the scene a little more in some of my poems. Trying to get an "in the moment" feel to it.

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  6. I believe we all deserve Venus status ... for me, this was mournful and uplifting at the same time.

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  7. Longing floats upon lyrics of a sailors song

    Lovely!

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  8. Intriguing and well-written. Thanks.

    =)

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  9. Thanks everyone! I really appreciate ya'll stopping by to read and the wonderful comments.

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  10. This is very powerful , Dana , reminded me of the sxene in "Forrest Gump" where lieitenant Dan sat atop the mast in a storm, minus his legs , daring his demons to take gim, cursing God, only to dind love with the dawn and the passing of the storm, cheers

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    1. Wow, I forgot all about that scene. I appreciate it.Thanks!

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  11. That's a lovely love poem, and so comforting. Love it Dana.

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  12. Thanks Sopphey,Lara and Veronica! I appreciate the support and lovely comments.

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